For Your Reading Pleasure: Rewrite, Shorten, and Simplify

This week has been a busy week in Bredemarket-land, including work on some of the following client projects:

  • Creating the first deliverable as part of a three-part series of deliverables.
  • Reworking that first deliverable for more precision.
  • Preparing to start work on the second deliverable.
  • Drafting a blog post for a client.
  • Gathering information for an email newsletter for a client.
  • Following up on a couple of consulting opportunities that take advantage of my identity/biometric expertise.
  • Creating a promotional reel based upon the grapes in my backyard. (Yet another reel. I plan to reveal it next week.)
  • Engaging in other promotional activities on Bredemarket’s key social media channels.

Plus I’ve been working on some non-Bredemarket deliverables and meetings with a significant time commitment.

But there’s one more Bredemarket deliverable that I haven’t mentioned—because I’m about to discuss it now.

The task

Without going into detail, a client required me to repurpose a piece of third-party government-authored (i.e. non-copyrighted) text, originally written for a particular market.

  1. Rewrite the content for a different market.
  2. Shorten the text so it would be more attractive to the new market.
  3. Simplify the presentation of the text to make it even more attractive to the new market.

The request was clear, and I’ve already completed the first draft of the text and am working on the second draft.

But I wanted to dive into the three steps above—not regarding this particular client writing project, but in a more general way.

Step 1: Rewrite

When you’ve worked in a lot of different industries, you learn that each industry has its own language, including things you say—and things you don’t say.

I’ll give you an example that doesn’t reflect the particular project I was working on, but does reflect why rewriting is often necessary.

When I started in biometrics, the first two industries that I wrote about were law enforcement and benefits administration.

  • Law enforcement’s primary purpose is to catch bad people, although sometimes it can exonerate good people. So when you’re talking about law enforcement applications, you frequently use a lot of terms that are negative in nature, such as “surveillance,” “suspect,” and “mugshot.”
  • Benefits administration’s primary purpose is to help good people, although sometimes it can catch bad people who steal benefits from good people. So when you’re talking about benefits administration applications, you tend toward more positive terms such as “beneficiary.” And if you take a picture of a beneficiary’s face, for heaven’s sake DON’T REFER TO THE FACIAL IMAGE AS A “MUGSHOT.”

These two examples illustrate why something originally written for “market 1” must often be rewritten for “market 2.”

But sometimes a simple rewrite isn’t enough.

Step 2: Shorten

Now I don’t play in the B2C market in which crisp text is extremely necessary. But it’s needed in the various B2G and B2B markets also—some more than others.

If you are writing for more scientific markets, your readers are more accustomed to reading long, academic, “Sage”-like blocks of text.

But if you are writing for other markets, such as hospitality, your readers not only don’t want to read long blocks of text, but actively despise it.

You need to “get to the point.”

Tim Conway (Sr.), as repeatedly played during Jim Healy’s old radio show. Sourced from the Jim Healy Tribute Site.

In my particular project, “market 1” was one of those markets that valued long-windedness, while “market 2” clearly didn’t. So I had to cut the text down significantly, using the same techniques that I use when rewriting my “draft 0.5” (which a client NEVER sees) to my “draft 1” (which I turn over to the client).

But sometimes a simple shorten isn’t enough.

Step 3: Simplify

If you know me, you know I’m not graphically inclined.

Someday I will reach this level of graphic creativity. Originally created by Jleedev using Inkscape and GIMP. Redrawn as SVG by Ben Liblit using Inkscape. – Own work, Public Domain, link.

But I still pay attention to the presentation of my words.

Remember those long blocks of text that I mentioned earlier? One way to break them up is to use bullets.

  • Bullets break up long blocks of text into manageable chunks.
  • Bullets are easier to read.

So your reader will be very happy.

But as I was editing this particular piece of content, sometimes I ran into long lists of bullets, which weren’t really conducive to the reading experience.

QuestionAnswerWhat does this mean?
Why are long lists of bullets bad?Because with enough repetition, they’re just as bad as long blocks of text.Your readers will tune you out.
How can you format long lists of bullets into something easier to read?One way is to convert the bullets into a table with separate entries.Your readers will enjoy a more attractive presentation.
What do tables do for your reader?They arrange the content in two dimensions rather than one.The readers’ eyes move in two directions, rather than just one.
Hey, wait a minute…Yeah, I just plugged my seven questions again by intentionally using the first three: why, how, and what.You can go here to download the e-book “Seven Questions Your Content Creator Should Ask You.”
I don’t have the skill to make WordPress tables look as attractive as Microsoft Word tables. But even this table breaks up the monotony of paragraphs and lists, don’t you think?

So what happened?

After I had moved through the three steps of rewriting, shortening, and simplifying the original content, I had a repurposed piece of content that was much more attractive to the “hungry people” (target audience) who were going to read it.

These people wouldn’t fall asleep while reading the content, and they wouldn’t be offended by some word that didn’t apply to them (such as “mugshot”).

So don’t be afraid to repurpose—even for a completely different market.

I do it all the time.

Look at two of my recent reels. Note the differences. But note the similarities.

The identity/biometrics version of the reel.
The Inland Empire version of the same reel.

So which of Bredemarket’s markets do you think will receive the “grapes” reel?

Stay tuned.

Little 15…Second Reels

Last week I created two promotional reels. You probably saw the reels for my identity/biometric services and Inland Empire services.

I wanted to share the latter on NextDoor, but that service wouldn’t accept the video.

Thinking the 45 second length was the issue, I decided to create a 15 second version of the Inland Empire video…and a 15 second version of the (50 second) identity/biometrics video while I was at it.

For those of you who would like to”a nice surprise…every once in a while.”

Identity/biometric.
Inland Empire.

By the way, I’m considering creating a new Inland Empire video…with an agricultural theme. (Fruits, not cows.)

Inland Empire Firms: Does Anyone Know Who You Are?

Inland Empire firms: does anyone know who you are?

Who can help your firm create content?

  • Blog posts?
  • Case studies?
  • White papers?
  • Social media?
  • Market and competitive analyses?

Contact Bredemarket: https://bredemarket.com/contact/

Bredemarket Inland Empire Services.

Identity/Biometric Firms: Does Anyone Know Who You Are?

Identity/biometric firms: does anyone know who you are?

Who can help your firm create content?

Who knows identity/biometrics:

  • Biometric modalities?
  • Verification and authentication factors?

Who can provide content:

  • Blog posts?
  • Case studies?
  • White papers?
  • Social media?
  • Market and competitive analyses?

I know who can help.

Contact Bredemarket: https://bredemarket.com/contact/

Bredemarket Identity Firm Services, July 2024.

Maximizing Event ROI with the Bredemarket 2800 Medium Writing Service

Part of the IBM exhibit at CeBIT 2010. CC BY 2.0, https://commons.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?curid=10326025.

When your company attends events, you’ll want to maximize your event return on investment (ROI) by creating marketing content that you publish before, during, and after the event.

This is how you do it.

Including:

And I’ll spill a couple of secrets along the way.

The first secret (about events)

I’m going to share two secrets in this post. OK, maybe they’re not that secret, but you’d think they ARE secrets because no one acknowledges them.

The first one has to do with event attendance. You personally might be awed and amazed when you’re in the middle of an event and surrounded by hundreds, or thousands, or tens of thousands of people. All of whom are admiring your exhibit booth or listening to your CEO speak.

Technically not a CEO (Larry Ellison’s official title is Chief Technology Officer, and the CEO is Safra Catz), but you get the idea. By Oracle PR Hartmann Studios – CC BY 2.0, https://commons.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?curid=47277811.

But guess what?

Many, many more people are NOT at the event.

They can’t see your exhibit booth, and can’t hear your speaker. They’re on the outside, TRYING to look in.

CC-BY-2.0. Link.

And all the money you spent on booth space and travel and light-up pens does NOTHING for the people who aren’t there…

Unless you bring the event to them. Your online content can bring the event to people who were never there.

But you need to plan, create, and approve your content before, during, and after the event. Here’s how you do that.

Three keys to creating event-related content

Yes, you can just show up at an event, take some pictures, and call it a day. But if you want to maximize your event return on investment, you’ll be a bit more deliberate in executive your event content. Ideally you should be:

Planning your event content

Before the event begins, you need to plan your content. While you can certainly create some content on a whim as opportunity strikes, you need to have a basic idea of what content you plan to create.

Content I created before attending the APMP Western Chapter Training Day on October 29, 2021. From https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9rS5Mc3w4Nk.
  • Before the event. Why should your prospects and customers care about the event? How will you get prospects and customers to attend the event? What will attendees and non-attendees learn from the event?
  • During the event. What event activities require content generation? Who will cover them? How will you share the content?
Some dude creating Morphoway-related content for Biometric Update at the (then) ConnectID Expo in 2015.
  • After the event. What lessons were learned? How will your prospects and customers benefit from the topics covered at the event? Why should your prospects buy the product you showcased at the event?

Creating your event content

Once you have planned what you want to do, you need to do it. Before, during, and after the event, you may want to create the following types of content:

  • Blog posts. These can announce your attendance at the event before it happens, significant goings-on at the event (such as your CEO’s keynote speech or the evening party launching your new product), or lessons learned from the event (what your CEO’s speech or your new product means for your prospects and clients). Blog posts can be created relatively quickly (though not as quick as some social media posts), and definitely benefit your bottom line.
  • Social media. Social media such as Facebook, Instagram, and LinkedIn can also be used before, during, and after the event. Social media excels at capturing the atmosphere of the event, as well as significant activities. When done right, it lets people experience the event who were never there.
  • E-mails. Don’t forget about e-mails before, during, and after the event. I forgot about e-mails once and paid the price. I attended an event but neglected to tell my e-mail subscribers that I was going to be there. When I got to the event, I realized that hardly any of the attendees understood the product I was offering, and were not the people who were hungry for my product. If I had stocked the event with people from my e-mail list, the event would have been more productive for me.
  • Data sheets. Are you announcing a new product at an event? Have the data sheet ready.
  • Demonstration scripts. Are you demonstrating a new or existing product at the event? Script out your demonstration so that your demonstrators start with the same content and make the points YOU want them to make.
  • Case studies and white papers. While these usually come into play after the event, you may want to release an appropriate case study or white paper before or during the event, tied to the event topic. Are you introducing a new product at an industry conference? Time your product-related white paper for release during the conference. And promote the white paper with blog posts, social media, and e-mails.
  • Other types of content. There are many other types of content that you can release before, during, or after an event. Here’s a list of them.

Approving your event content

Make sure that your content approval process is geared for the fast-paced nature of events. I can’t share details, but:

  • If your content approval process requires 24 hours, then you can kiss on-site event coverage goodbye. What’s the point in covering your CEO’s Monday 10:00 keynote speech if the content doesn’t appear until 11:00…on Tuesday?
  • If your content approval process doesn’t have a timeline, then you can kiss ALL event coverage goodbye. There have been several times when I’ve written blog posts announcing my company’s attendance at an event…and the blog posts weren’t approved until AFTER the event was already over. I salvaged the blog posts via massive rewrites.

So how are you going to generate all this content? This brings us to my proposed solution…and the second secret.

The second secret (about Bredemarket’s service)

By Karl Thomas Moore – Own work, CC BY-SA 4.0, https://commons.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?curid=58968347.

The rest of this post talks about one of Bredemarket’s services, the Bredemarket 2800 Medium Writing Service. For those who haven’t heard about it, it’s a service where I provide between 2,800 and 3,200 words of written text.

“But John,” you’re asking. “How is a single block of 3,200 words of text going to help me with my event marketing?”

Time to reveal the second secret…

You can break up those 3,200 words any way you like.

For example, let’s say that you’re planning on attending an event. You could break the text up as follows:

  • One 500-word blog post annnouncing your attendance at the event.
  • Three 100-word social media posts before the event.
  • One 500-word blog post as the event begins.
  • One 300-word product data sheet prepared before the event and released on the second day of the event.
  • One 500-word blog post announcing the new product.
  • Three 100-word social media posts tied to the new product announcement.
  • One 500-word post-event blog post with lessons learned.
  • Three 100-word social media posts after the event.

For $2,000 (as of June 2024), you can benefit from written text for complete event coverage, arranged in any way you need.

So how can you and your company receive these benefits?

Read about the Bredemarket 2800 Medium Writing Service

First, read the data sheet for the Bredemarket 2800 Medium Writing Service so you understand the offer and process.

Contact Bredemarket…now

Second, contact Bredemarket to get the content process started well BEFORE your event. Book a meeting with me at calendly.com/bredemarket. Be sure to fill out the information form so I can best help you.

Alternatively, you can

But don’t wait. If your event is in September…don’t contact me in October.

Take Me to the (Login.gov IAL2) Pilot

As further proof that I am celebrating, rather than hiding, my “seasoned” experience—and you know what the code word “seasoned” means—I am entitling this blog post “Take Me to the Pilot.”

Although I’m thinking about a different type of “pilot”—a pilot to establish that Login.gov can satisfy Identity Assurance Level 2 (IAL2).

A recap of Login.gov and IAL2-non compliance

I just mentioned IAL2 in a blog post on Wednesday, with this seemingly throwaway sentence.

So if you think you can use Login.gov to access a porn website, think again.

From https://bredemarket.com/2024/04/10/age-assurance-meets-identity-assurance-level-2/.

The link in that sentence directs the kind reader to a post I wrote in November 2023, detailing that fact that the GSA Inspector General criticized…the GSA…for implying that Login.gov was IAL2-compliant when it was not. The November post references a GSA-authored August blog post which reads in part (in bold):

Login.gov is on a path to providing an IAL2-compliant identity verification service to its customers in a responsible, equitable way.

From https://www.gsa.gov/blog/2023/08/18/reducing-fraud-and-increasing-access-drives-record-adoption-and-usage-of-logingov.

Because it obviously wouldn’t be good to do it in an irresponsible inequitable way.

But the GSA didn’t say how long that path would be. Would Login.gov be IAL2-compliant by the end of 2023? By mid 2024?

It turns out the answer is neither.

Eight months later we have…a pilot

You would think that achieving IAL2 compliance would be a top priority. After all, the longer that Login.gov doesn’t comply, the more government agencies that will flock to IAL2-compliant ID.me.

Enter Steve Craig of PEAK.IDV and the weekly news summaries that he posts on LinkedIn. Today’s summary includes the following item:

4/ GSA’s Login.gov Pilots Enhanced Identity Verification

Login.gov’s pilot will allow users to match a live selfie with the photo on a self-supplied form of photo ID, such as a driver’s license

Other interesting updates in the press release 👇

From https://www.linkedin.com/posts/stevenbcraig_digitalidentity-aml-compliance-activity-7184539504504930306-LVPF/.

And here’s what GSA’s April 11 press release says.

Specifically, over the next few months, Login.gov will:

Pilot facial matching technology consistent with the National Institute of Standards and Technology’s Digital Identity Guidelines (800-63-3) to achieve evidence-based remote identity verification at the IAL2 level….

Using proven facial matching technology, Login.gov’s pilot will allow users to match a live selfie with the photo on a self-supplied form of photo ID, such as a driver’s license. Login.gov will not allow these images to be used for any purpose other than verifying identity, an approach which reflects Login.gov’s longstanding commitment to ensuring the privacy of its users. This pilot is slated to start in May with a handful of existing agency-partners who have expressed interest, with the pilot expanding to additional partners over the summer. GSA will simultaneously seek an independent third party assessment (Kantara) of IAL2 compliance, which GSA expects will be completed later this year. 

From https://www.gsa.gov/about-us/newsroom/news-releases/general-services-administrations-logingov-pilot-04112024#.

In short, GSA’s April 11 press release about the Login.gov pilot says that it expects to complete IAL2 compliance later this year. So it’s going to take more than a year for the GSA to repair the gap that its Inspector General identified.

My seasoned response

Once I saw Steve’s update this morning, I felt it sufficiently important to share the news among Bredemarket’s various social channels.

With a picture.

B-side of Elton John “Your Song” single issued 1970.

For those of you who are not as “seasoned” as I am, the picture depicts the B-side of a 1970 vinyl 7″ single (not a compact disc) from Elton John, taken from the album that broke Elton in the United States. (Not literally; that would come a few years later.)

By the way, while the original orchestrated studio version is great, the November 1970 live version with just the Elton John – Dee Murray – Nigel Olsson trio is OUTSTANDING.

From https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cC1ocO0pVgs.

Back to Bredemarket social media. If you go to my Instagram post on this topic, I was able to incorporate an audio snippet from “Take Me to the Pilot” (studio version) into the post. (You may have to go to the Instagram post to actually hear the audio.)

Not that the song has anything to do with identity verification using government ID documents paired with facial recognition. Or maybe it does; Elton John doesn’t know what the song means, and even lyricist Bernie Taupin doesn’t know what the song means.

So from now on I’m going to say that “Take Me to the Pilot” documents future efforts toward IAL2 compliance. Although frankly the lyrics sound like they describe a successful iris spoofing attempt.

Through a glass eye, your throne
Is the one danger zone

From https://genius.com/Elton-john-take-me-to-the-pilot-lyrics.

Postscript

For you young whippersnappers who don’t understand why the opening image mentioned “54 Years On,” this is a reference to another Elton John song.

And it’s no surprise that the live version is better.

From https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rRngmF-AcFQ.

Now I’m going to listen to this all day. Cue the Instagram post (if Instagram has access to the 17-11-70/11-17-70 version).

The Wildebeest Speaks! (Am I insane?)

I really don’t need yet ANOTHER content distribution avenue.

From https://www.linkedin.com/pulse/why-non-authority-linkedin-newsletters-writing-newsletter-guj0c/.

But I created one anyway, just so I can understand how LinkedIn newsletters work.

Bredemarket’s new LinkedIn newsletter is called “The Wildebeest Speaks.” I plan to publish once a month, more or less.

LinkedIn users can subscribe to the newsletter at https://www.linkedin.com/newsletters/the-wildebeest-speaks-7172984705846243328/.

Avoiding Antiquated Product Marketing

Identity/biometrics firms don’t just create social media channels for the firms themselves. Sometimes they create social media channels dedicated to specific products and services.

That’s the good news.

Here’s the bad news.

[REDACTED]

As I write this, it’s March 3. A firm hasn’t updated one of its product-oriented social media channels since February 20.

That’s February 20, 2020…back when most of us were still working in offices.

It’s not like the product no longer exists…but to the casual viewer it seems like it. As I noted in a previous post, a 2020 survey showed that 76% of B2B buyers make buying decisions primarily based on the winning vendor’s online content.

Now I’ll admit that I don’t always update all of Bredemarket’s social media platforms in a timely manner, but at least I update them more than once every four years. I even updated my podcast last month.

Sadly, I can’t help THIS product marketer, since Instagram posts are not one of my primary offerings.

If you’re an identity/biometric company that needs help with blogs, case studies, white papers, and similar text content, Bredemarket can work with you to deliver fresh content.

(Pizza Stories) The Worst Time to READ a Pizza Post on Social Media

Designed by Freepik.

Have you ever seen those posts from self-appointed gurus?

Specifically, the ones that authoritatively state the BEST time to WRITE a post on Instagram, or LinkedIn, or TikTok, or whatever?

I religiously ignore those posts for a simple reason: My country has multiple time zones. So the best time in one time zone may be the worst time in another time zone.

However, I can tell you the WORST time to READ a post in the PACIFIC Time Zone…if the post concerns pizza.

And I’ll explain what all this means…eventually.

Ophir Tal on awareness

In addition to saying WHEN to post, the gurus also provide authoritative (and often contradictory) advice about WHAT to post.

For example, some gurus assert that you MUST prioritize bottom of funnel (conversion) content over top of funnel (awareness) content because it’s most important to get people to buy.

Ophir Tal disagrees, and has evidence to support his position.

Ophir Tal on pizza

Ophir Tal self-identifies as a “LinkedIn Ghostwriter & Personal brand Builder for CEOs & Founders”…and part of the way he builds personal brands is via awareness. Here’s where Tal made this assertion about the importance of awareness.

Let’s look at Tal’s hook:

How I Got An Inbound Lead From A Post About Pizza

From Ophir Tal on LinkedIn.

This hook caught my attention. People want leads, and people like pizza, so I paid attention. But I also paid attention for a third reason that I’ll discuss later.

Tal describes how he wrote a LinkedIn post about a piece of pizza that he dropped by mistake, and how he acquired 9,400 views, 97 likes, and 112 comments from that single post. So he told the story a second time.

Tal then noted that the gurus would have recommended NOT posting this because he was “doing it wrong.” Specifically:

  • The post didn’t solve a problem for his potential clients. (Unless they regularly drop slices of pizza, I guess.)
  • It didn’t have a strong call to action.
  • It wasn’t targeted to his ideal clients. (Again, unless they regularly drop slices of pizza, or unless they love chicken wings.)

But despite doing everything wrong, that particular piece of content attracted the attention of someone “at a 6 figure ecom company.” After viewing the content, the reader looked at Tal’s profile and realized Tal could meet their need for ghostwriting services.

Tal earned a lead from his pizza post.

Again, this is only part of Tal’s story. I encourage you to read the rest here.

And now I’ll tell you the third reason why I paid attention to Tal’s post.

John Bredehoft on birthdays

As I noted above, I paid attention to Ophir Tal’s pizza post for two reasons:

  • People want leads.
  • People like pizza.

Now let’s jump back to a post I wrote all the way back in 2023, one that described why I’ve soured on the term “target audience.” (Or, in Tal’s words, “ideal clients.”) I started that post by wondering if the term “needy people” would be better than “target audience.” Yes, but not good enough.

I’ll grant that “needy people” has a negative connotation, like the person who is sad when people forget their birthday.

From “I’m Questioning Everything About Target Audiences, Including the Name.”

Why did I include that sentence?

I’ll let you in on a personal secret. When I wrote that, I was myself sad because a few people had forgotten my birthday.

Teddy alone at his pizza birthday party in 2018. Picture shared by Nick VinZant. Story here.

It turns out that these people had a VERY GOOD reason for forgetting my birthday. However, I cannot reveal this reason to you because the disclosure would force me to reveal someone’s personal identifiable information, or PII. (Mine.)

So after they remembered my birthday, one of them asked what I did for my birthday…and I told them that my wife, father-in-law, and brother-in-law went out to dinner.

For pizza.

And I also told them that there were leftovers, which my wife and I enjoyed a few days later.

Leftover pizza is the best pizza. Preparation credit: Pizza N Such, Claremont, California. Can I earn free pizza as a powerful influencer? Probably not, but I’ll disclose on the 0.00001% chance that I do.

A nice story, and while I was reading Ophir Tal’s story on dropped pizza, I realized that I had missed an opportunity to tell my own story about leftover pizza.

Time to channel Steve Jobs…

Oh, and there’s one more thing

I forgot to mention one thing about the Ophir Tal story.

When I read the story, it was around 4:00 pm in California.

So when I read about Tal’s dropped pizza, and thought about my leftover pizza (which I had already eaten)…I was hungry.

Target audience, needy people…hungry people

Coincidentally, “hungry people” is the phrase that I eventually decided was better than “needy people.”

Tal’s lead was hungry for ghostwriting services, and when they saw that Tal offered such a service, they contacted him.

What does this mean? I’ll go into that in a separate post.

But for now, remember that stories that raise awareness with your “hungry people” (target audience) are good stories to tell.

Maybe I should tell more stories.